Thursday, April 9, 2009

pile of pain



overcast and clouded
at rain ville
love never met love here
at last the storm came
eager hate engulfed him
he uttered a long piercing cry
maybe it was of pain or of fear

he struggled to find a way
to wash this pile of pain
in the drain

as the drops fall
he walks towards the edge
lookin down and smiling,
...
the depth seemed satisfying


27 comments:

Phoenix said...

sigh!!

pain penetrates me
drop by drop

-sappho


beautiful and very poignant!!

ANWESA said...

dat was poignant,deep..

Kartz said...

I like the way you metaphorically conveyed his mindset...

But does the said pain/fear bring enough courage to take that deathly plunge. Makes me wonder..?

Keep writing. Spread the voice.

Peace. Be well.

Mayz said...

i think there is someone to guide u outta dat deep trench now bro...

Beauty and the BEast said...

tahts raw emotion and concentrated pain, made sound beautiful by words...

bzb4u said...

nt really...
wz inspired by a frend who lukz lyk dracula..!!;P
bt thnx newaz...

n ths iz pretty gud..

How do we know said...

i loved this poem. really did.

oo7 said...

@ phoenix

thanks dear :)

Diya said...

wonderful imagination dear :) Loved it as if could feel the pain :) Great work :)

The EnCHANtress said...

I HATE PAIN! Lets be happy all the time and when pain creeps in just get a box of chocolates and chat. what ya think?

Chan

Lena said...

poignant indeed.. loved this poem, its probably one of the best i read from you :)

Beach Bum said...

eager hate engulfed himIt is really strange how "eager" hate can be for people. I include myself in this trait. Love, hope, courage, and faith are far more complex concepts that take time to develop.

But then again it is always far easier to destroy than create.

Great post as always.

joiedevivre said...

hmm can i use your poem for designing...??

Anand said...

loved it dude.
:-)

oo7 said...

@ anwesa

thank you .

oo7 said...

@ Kartz

thank you...

will keep on dropping the dew

oo7 said...

@ mayz

i know there is someone...but where?

oo7 said...

B&B

thanK you

oo7 said...

@ bzb4u

ohh..lol

BY chance,if u know any vampires...tell them i so want to meet them ;D

welcome here and thanks a ton ji

oo7 said...

@ how do we know

thanks and tc

oo7 said...

@ Diya

welcome here diya
and thanks a ton

tc and cheers

oo7 said...

@ chan

me too...but pain makes us realize what being happy is.

box of chocolates ... when are where? ;D

V

oo7 said...

@ chan

*when and where ?? lol

oo7 said...

@ Lena

thank you
:D hugs

oo7 said...

@ BB
as u said.. far easier to destroy then create

oo7 said...

@ jalebi girl

sure boss

oo7 said...

@ anand

thanx mate...

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